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Post by Anyanka on Jun 8, 2005 14:05:49 GMT 12
Alright, I know this isnt really fanfiction, but more like poetry... but I wrote that poem about 2 weeks ago, and I frankly thinks it is beautiful. So guys, tell me what you think!! Darkness and pain invade my soul Wherever I go, I feel sad and cold My heart aches, bleeds, and cries My soul screams and begs the skies These tears I shed are vain, I resign Because I know that he will never be mine Days go by and I begin to wonder How much time will I bare to suffer Vicious sun, why be so bitter? Icy moon, spare me nights of torture It’s in my dreams that I find love This love which I am so much athirst of Phony lies, nothing but illusions That aspire so much confusion Fantasies become reality is all that I desire Kisses, tears, passion, and pleasure My darling, my secret love, it’s crazy how I need you But never will you know how much I love you.
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Post by Mads on Jun 8, 2005 15:57:56 GMT 12
Wow, that a really good poem Anya. It's very touching. I wish I could write poetry that well for my English class.
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Post by Selene on Jun 8, 2005 19:03:09 GMT 12
Beautiful. I love poetry. When I get depressed, I write poetry. Just check out my lj
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Post by Anyanka on Jun 9, 2005 8:22:09 GMT 12
Aww thank you guys Yeah that was actually for French class... and I wrote something similar in French (not pretty) and wrote a better one in English
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Post by Selene on Jun 9, 2005 17:11:11 GMT 12
Heh, if I wrote anything that my form teacher would think I was depressed ^^ she already thinks my friends are..
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Post by Xpressionless on Jun 9, 2005 17:18:33 GMT 12
Awesome poem Anya ^^ I can't think of how I would describe it....hmmm emotive ^^
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Post by Anyanka on Jun 10, 2005 0:37:40 GMT 12
Thank you so much! Im moved
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Post by QueenOfDarkness on Jun 24, 2005 3:07:22 GMT 12
I just LOVE your poem!
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Post by Anyanka on Jun 24, 2005 3:36:23 GMT 12
Thank you!
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Post by ignosce mihi carissima on Jul 18, 2005 21:43:33 GMT 12
Great poetry! The last poem I wrote was supposed to be satirical (it was utter crap) and my teacher gave it an 8, but then again, she's a crazy militant feminist... I hate writing poetry.
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Post by Anyanka on Jul 19, 2005 2:31:46 GMT 12
Thanks! You know what? I used to HATE poetry... I dont know what happened to me
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Post by ignosce mihi carissima on Jul 3, 2006 12:50:01 GMT 12
Your poetry is much better than most of the unpublished, or even published in some cases, poetry I've read. Especially on fanfiction.net people seem to think that if they write normal sentences and put in a new line in odd places they've suddenly made a wonderful poem, which is really irritating until something like this comes along. I'm not saying that I can write fantastic poetry, or that *good* poetry has to be in rhyming couplets, but it should at least evoke emotion in the reader, which your poem does very well. OK, I'll stop ranting now. I did have a great time writing Latin poetry a couple of years ago - we had to write a love poem in the style of Catullus, which was hilarious.
EDIT: Any chance you'll put the French version up?
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Post by malachi on Jun 7, 2007 2:44:13 GMT 12
that was very moving, good job
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